It looks pretty good to me. The ‘I’m no one’ feels odd though, mostly due to it being in the center channel when she’s speaking the line off-camera.
I’ve been working on the mix since uploading, it was mostly a quick mockup. I’ve also retimed it a bit.
Maybe it would work better if you kept the line where it was originally but just zoomed in on her enough to crop out her mouth and/or added more flashes of light obscuring it. Then as she says ‘no one’ you pull back and match it up to the existing camera move in that shot, essentially making the entire shot a more dramatic zoom.
An interesting idea. I tested it and it doesn’t not work, but I’m also not entirely sold. I’d certainly need a 4K file for the shot too because you need to zoom in at least 200% to make it work.
It might also be worth looking at other sources for ‘no one’ since it feels a bit less intense than her inflection in this scene. You could also try using the line ‘nobody’ from TLJ (‘They were nobody’).
It is less intense than the preceding line, but it is oddly not that less intense than what it replaced. I’ll definitely look for alternatives, but it’ll be a tricky line to frankenbite, you’d need to get it perfect since there’s no other sound to hide any less than perfect edits.