It feels odd to go from Kylo on the destroyer to down on the planet with no establishing shots in between.
Yes I think an establishing shot would be ideal. My goal here was to try to see if just purely through music and sound design I could make the cut work. At this point I’m now too into it to tell, so feedback like this is valuable.
However, the crawl is a big improvement. The only thing that feels very strange to me is to mention that Leia is ‘ailing’ right before playing up the strength of the Resistance.
The second graph still needs some work, yeah, that’s one of the things. On the one hand it feels weird to even say something like that at all in a crawl, but part of me thinks it’s necessary set up for her out of left field death. Perhaps I can try to work in the word “persevere” or something like that.