The new docu shot you’re using fits very well. I think an alternative way to cut the scene would be to remove the deleted Kylo shots from TLJ, and instead cut to one of those establishing shots, but maybe create the shadows of those TIE fighters drift across the landscape (or the TIEs themselves). That might help glue together the planet shot and the ground shot. The bridge shot right now feels a little odd, since we see him on the bridge, then a few seconds later in the middle of a battle.