Hi Poppa
Re: Broom boy and the ring. Go with your instincts on what works best for you.
The truth is, You’ll never please everyone so if it’s going to be a split vote, your own preference should be what decides it.
I just rewatched it…and it does get better with subsequent views, but i just had a thought (which in all honesty probably wont work)
Have you toyed with reordering the shots at all.
Currently it’s:-
- broom boy close up
- Ship in atmosphere jumping to hyperspace
- Broom boy closer up
- Wide shot of him lifting broom as a lightsaber
I just wondered if
- Broom boy close up (but hold for entire duration whereas before it was split between shots 1 and 3)
- Ship going to hyperspace
- Wide shot raising broom
The truth is that holding the close up/slow zoom for that entirety over one shot will probably be too much.
But the idea behind the suggestion is this:-
The lingering close up is broom boy watching the ship. So we switch to his pov just as it jumps to HS
but rather than falling back to him watching ‘empty space’ he is more immediately roused into wanting to be a hero?
I don’t know, without seeing it it’s impossible to tell if there’s anything to it.
Another suggestion is to keep the order of shots the same but rather than hold so long on the Second close up of broom boy, instead slow the shot of the ship for as long as possible until it jumps?
As if it’s in a nice slow steady cruise and then BOOM (original timing resumes)
As above, there might not be enough material to work with and even if there is, there might be limits to how slow you can make it before it just looks overly manipulated and hence draws too much attention to itself?
But, Im just throwing some ideas out there to see if there’s any other way to balance out the removal of the ring whilst still using the same overall timings?