I really like this, RogueLeader! And I really like implication that Obi-Wan is who Padme trusted!
It’s interesting because that was actually the intention of the scene (we’re just missing the scene that would overtly imply this, where Padme meets with Obi-wan). I like the rearrangement, it definitely seems to establish that rift with Padme early on.
And I also really like the reordered Mustafar talk, though the video game lines nag at me, as does the continuity of where Padme’s standing in her last line.