Fair points, especially that last one; hadn’t considered that. I’ll have to consider that as I mock it up.
Eddy, do you have any specific ideas about the crawl? I like what we have now, but would hear you out.
Ah sorry, this hidden in an earlier post, my changes in bold:
The sinister FIRST ORDER plots its return to power, hidden in the ashes of the fallen Empire.
Failing to convince the NEW REPUBLIC to investigate this emerging threat, General Leia Organa mobilizes a covert RESISTANCE while the First Order completes a devastating new weapon.
Your crawl is far far better than theatrical, but I still felt it could be tweaked a bit to set the stage. Po is surprised to see the First Order ships, but we don’t know that should be surprising.
As you know, we don’t get any conference table scene describing the state of the galaxy till TROS, so I thought stronger language could make it clearer. But also your crawl is close enough, either way thankful for the edit.