Sign In

Post #1317469

Author
FreezingTNT2
Parent topic
Return of the Jedi (My saga edit)
Link to post in topic
https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1317469/action/topic#1317469
Date created
4-Jan-2020, 8:48 PM

IlFanEditore said:

Crawl ideas?

Here’s my new crawl test.

*The GALACTIC EMPIRE has begun the construction of a new, dreadful space station, even more
powerful than the first Death Star. The Rebel Alliance struggles to survive.

With the support of his allies, Luke Skywalker has returned to TATOOINE, hoping to free his friend
Han Solo from the clutches of the vile gangster Jabba The Hutt

Meanwhile, EMPEROR PALPATINE travels to the Endor system to overlook the construction and master a
new plan to spell certain doom for the Alliance…*

Please, tell me what you think about it and what you’d change.

You forgot to put a period after “Hutt”.