Re-watching the Radio scene, I think what feel’s off to me is essentially reusing scenes of Kylo’s facial reactions that occurred with Rey & dice to be then used again for the radio. Granted, the way you cut it it seems like his reactions to the radio are truthfully genuine and could have been in the movie … but since it is recycling the scenes, it makes it a bit too “fan-edity.”

A suggestion I would have is to actually remove the Rey scene. In TLJ, it was showing that Rey was “done” with Kylo and severing the link she has with him. But in ROTS … it’s kinda like “Lol, just kidding, we still connected yo.” So really, we don’t need that scene or metaphor/symbolism/etc.

By removing that, you won’t have to reuse scenes to make it work. Also, for fun and giggles … I wonder if it would be better to try and use “less” dialogue for Palps? More static before and after with him simply saying “find me?” That way the scene and moment has more of an impact to take it in? Also the different dialogues and laughter don’t really match up … kind of like in shows they voice over scenes and you can totally hear it not matching the scene. Plus, I think Palp’s voice needs to be distorted a bit … that way it is not too clean.