DZ-330 said:

Here’s my take, a little less wordy but trying to make the same point as yours.

STAR WARS

Episode IX
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER

Luke Skywalker’s heroic
act has inspired countless
worlds to stand up against
the diabolical FIRST ORDER.

REY, under the guidance of
General Leia Organa, continues
her Jedi training, hoping to
find a way to communicate
with Jedi of the past.

Meanwhile, Supreme Leader
KYLO REN seeks the mysterious
power of his former master,
determined to end the war and
silence the echos of the past…

This is probably the most well-written fan crawl I’ve ever read. Well done.

Edit: In regards to Palpatine’s transmission - maybe have it play over the opening scene of Kylo storming Mustafar?