This sounds quite interesting. I like the ideas for TFA and TLJ. I would try and rework the crawl a bit for TFA though. But hinting to Palps from the beginning is a great idea. Especially the idea of adding him to the end of TLJ and Kylo on Mustafar at the beginning. I’m not sure how I feel about deleting Kijimi from the film. By doing this your not left with much of a movie after adding much of the beginning to TLJ. Also making Palp a clone is an interesting idea, but does open up the thought that no one could ever kill him if there is just an endless number of clones. But all in all I’m interested in checking this out