I think that works really well.
Although I do think that the previous version you put together felt more dreamlike, particularly with the voices of Han and Kylo Ren echoing in the background.
I noticed that you also switched to doing simple dissolves in/out on those clips. I’m wondering (and this may be a terrible idea, but here it is): what if instead of fading to black between the clips, it just cut back to Rey sleeping in the chair?
- Scene starts, Rey establishing shot
- Quick cut to dream
- Quick cut back to Rey
- Quick cut back to dream
Eventually moving faster and not returning to Rey until she wakes up.
I’m just playing with ideas here. I think we may have more to work with after seeing The Rise of Skywalker.
P.S. When are you seeing the movie, by the way?