All your edits seem on point but would you for v2 consider maybe some harder changes like ones found in CarstenJ.dk of Solo edit here:
https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Solo-A-Star-Wars-Edit-Released/id/65231/page/1

eg:

After crawl and planet pan open with Han a Quira escaping on speeder and rework the crawls text to fit.
Less in your face lucky dice shots
Add deleted scene where he gets demoted to the infantry
No Han getting the blaster from Becket.
Cut most of Han speaking wookie.
When formerly introduced to Chewie, cut out Han saying “Chewbacca” as it sounded patronizing
Fix the over the top score which makes your ears bleed about half way through the train heist or cut heist down.
Val does not sacrifice herself stupidly she just gets blown up by the droids.
Cutdown the kiss between Han & Quira in the falcon by cutting to Becket as to similar to Empires Han & Leia kiss in falcon.
Cut L3 fist pumping the air and shouting “Rebellion!” at the spice mines