Hey Pearce! I hope Hal doesn’t mind me chiming in, but it is really nice to hear constructive feedback from a fresh perspective. Your thought on the scene reordering is interesting but makes total sense. I’ll leave that to Hal and see what he says about it.
About the Star Destroyer reaction, maybe in the shot of Finn walking up the steps of the ship, you could insert a sound of the Star Destroyer jumping out of hyperspace, just like what we hear at the beginning of The Last Jedi when the Resistance was evacuating. That would be the simplest addition I think.