I get what you’re trying to do with the end battle over Yavin but there are two problems.
- Some of the ships are clearly just blocks.
- You cut from one scene where the space represented on the screen has many ships, then in the next scene it has 2-3. What happened to the rest? It’s immediately jarring.
The Mos Eisley scene doesn’t work because the Jedha scene presents a densely populated city with a lot of buildings that are all jammed together. That’s not how the city looks as represented in ANH.