Hope we’re not hijacking you’re thread, Octorox, by having this discussion. Just let us know if you want us to move it someplace else.

sade makes a good point that there still seems to be this element dropped where Anakin is suspicious of Padme hiding something from him. Anakin seems to think something is going on between Obi-Wan and Padme (not necessarily romantic), and so when Anakin sees them together on Mustafar, it is like his fears are almost immediately justified, causing him to have such an extreme reaction and choking Padme. This is sort of where I got the idea to restructure the seeds of Rebellion scenes to imply Padme might be meeting with Obi-Wan, “a Jedi she trusts”, about the Rebellion and the conspiracy against Palpatine.

Additionally, I wonder if you could somehow tie Anakin executing Dooku with Anakin not being made a master (maybe the Jedi could review security hologram footage of his death), if that would help solidify Anakin’s views as the Jedi being hypocritical, and just as selfish as the Sith.

Alternatively, you could cut out more of the “Jedi are evil” lines and try to focus more on him just wanting to save Padme and selling his soul for it.