Yes! This is so much better. I honestly think the original dialogue makes little sense anyway.
Ani: I care for you too, but I…
Padmé: You miss your mother.
What? You can’t care for one person and miss another person at the same time? It’s just a confusing thing to say.
Ha yes! That’s another reason I cut it. Although that idea of Anakin missing his mother might be helpful. I know it’s also mentioned in the Jedi Council scene as well…but if one wanted to have that moment here in this scene it could go:
Padme: …a little too warm for my taste.
-Anakin looks down
Padme: You miss your mother
-Anakin looks back up at Padme
-wider shot of Anakin giving Padme the trinket
It might be too jarring visually…going from wide shots to close ups back to wide shots…