My personal favourite third paragraph variants are these two, they aren't overly wordy, formating isn't too bad and Amidala's name doesn't take up half the screen! Would have liked the uppercase ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC to all be on one line, but it hasn't ended up looking too bad at all. I'm with Trooperman on his ideas about Amidala's roles, it makes it seem like she really wants to make changes in the political system, something her honorary title of 'Queen' didn't really allow. While Rebel11_38's idea about the death of the previous Senator is interesting, I personally think the permanent role of Senator is more important for Amidala's character, showing her deep desire for change. You still don't lose the character's bravery as she still knows she is in danger and is still willing to push the issues.