Wanted to start off by saying I appreciate the time and effort it probably took you to write this all up. You made it pretty enjoyable to read!

I like how you described the initial scene, but when you get into further explanations, I don’t think it is as necessary to go into as much detail for the scenes most of us already know by heart. I think it would be good to emphasize your changes and cuts more than the content of the scenes as they are theatrically. Unless the scenes have major changes and you feel “setting the scene” is necessary.

Anyway, looking forward to your next post.