In my future edit of the first film, Amidala is born as a queen and not elected. This is because it seemed ridiculous that the Naboo would elect her the head of the planet at such a young age. With this in mind, if you say “former queen”, then this would mean she is no longer the queen. A born queen would not randomly quit, however; they’re queen for life.
Where does the “Senator” come in? It was going to be a huge pain in the neck making all the cuts and adjustments needed to completely edit out Padme’s “Senator” status. Then, MagnoliaFan suggested that she could be both. Her queen status is more of a title rather than an actual job. Queen Amidala=Queen Elizabeth, while Sio Bibble=Tony Blair, basically. The idea of the crawl was to set up that she was now also serving as a Senator, while not going into a terrible amount of detail about it.
However, the screenshot of the 3rd paragraph was still slightly different from my crawl. “The” is missing in front of “Senator”, which is OK for spacing’s sake. However, would you capitalize “Senator” in this case? I think you’re right but I want to make certain. Also, I’ve decided to change “is en route” to “returns” because it sounds better to me- more active sounding.
If spacing gets messed up in paragraph 3 with these changes, feel free to insert “Padme” in front of “Amidala”. You get the idea. Pretty much any little words I’ve changed to improve spacing can be messed around with. Only please post screenshots afterwards just so I can confirm it.
Sorry I couldn’t use the suggestion, Ric!
But “rose to power” makes perfect sense and sounds good. The reason I was reluctant to go with it was that I wasn’t sure whether I wanted to word Palpatine’s nomination