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Post #129859

Author
Trooperman
Parent topic
Episode II: Shroud of the Dark Side (the TM edit) (Released)
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Date created
11-Aug-2005, 11:53 AM
Thanks for your feedback, everyone! Here are my thoughts on the subject:

1. It would be nice if there wasn't the one word hanging over at the end, but if it does, that doesn't concern me as much
2. "En route" probably should be on the same line- is there any way you could cheat (compress the text a tiny bit on that line) in order to fit "en route" on the top line? If not, perhaps see what inserting the word "Padme" in front of "Amidala" would do to improve the spacing, so that you could move "en route" down to the lower line.
3. First paragraph- yes, the last line was justified in the originals if it was this long. But could you change "power of" to "leadership"? If it turns out to excede five lines, perhaps you could remove the word "star" and try to get the spacing good.

Queen Pamde Amidala, now
serving as senator of Naboo, is
en route to Coruscant to vote
on the critical issue of creating
an ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC to
support the overwhelmed Jedi....

How would that formatting work?

Mr. Freeman- thanks for the info! I'm trying to get these to match the "Faces" and "DC" editions.

Wajas- thanks for the grammar note! I should've caught it as I'm picky about that myself.

Thanks again! The crawl looks fantastic!