I think it works.

I do still really like the theatrical transition from Finn to the island though. Maybe it’s enough to go from the original wide shot of the island to the small figure of Rey already climbing the steps.

It’s also a shame to lose the overhead shots of Rey approaching Luke. An ideal version for me would be to have Rey bypass the huts on first approach, then paint Luke out of those aerial shots and have Rey approach the spot where she saw him in the vision, then look slightly confused and walk down to the huts. That’s probably too involved though and I’m not even sure if it would work.