First, looking real good at the moment, even though I can barely see any stars!
The initial problem with the spacing of the last line of the first paragraph shouldn't have been an issue as it shouldn't actually even be justified. I can't tell if this has been fixed in the latest version since it is far in the distance in the screenshot.
My only big problem with this crawl is the last line, I hate single word lines (or lines containing two short words)! It really disrupts the balance in paragraphs and I used to go to great lengths on the magazine I work on to avoid it at all costs (now most of my fixes are automated so I rarely have to do anything!). Now, I know this is actually a problem with the official crawl (twice actually in Ep II), but still something I personally would like fixed.
Also not really a fan of having 'en route' spread over two lines.
My suggested fix is to drop a line and make it more compact. Both ROTS and ROTJ had a crawl with one less line and ANH had an additional line so it wont be 'unofficial' to add or bump a line.
Queen Amidala, now serving as
the senator of Naboo, is en route
to Coruscant to vote on the
critical issue of creating an
ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC to
support the overwhelmed Jedi....
...or...
Queen Amidala, now serving
as the senator of Naboo, is
en route to Coruscant to vote
on the critical issue of creating
an ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC to
support the overwhelmed Jedi....