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Post #1295073

Author
stickydixon
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Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone [Revisited]
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Date created
2-Sep-2019, 6:02 PM

Very nice intro, however, I still feel the order - Opening, flashback, Harry Gets the mail, Harry has dream - Is pretty awful. Is Harry dreaming of getting the mail? The order and pacing are quite jarring, and somewhat counter-intuitive.
I assume you couldn’t fit the mail scene in somewhere else?

I cannot stress how much I love these edits, I also cannot stress how much I wish the order were different. Were you to remove the mail moment and the ten years before text, the first flashback being Harry’s dream, I feel the opening would be perfect.

My two cents.