Cool idea! Looks pretty good I think. I think we take for granted how a well-placed establishing shot can help buffer a scene. It’s a thought I’ve had recently while I’ve been thinking about Prequel edit ideas.
When you originally talked about it, I liked the idea of the transition from Kylo looking outside, to the dogfight, then down to Han and co. also watching the dogfight. But you should trust your judgement. I would like to see some mockups up the scene orders you’re thinking about.
When I get the Falcon scene in some presentable shape I definitely will share a mockup, as there are quite a few small changes that have been implemented since the last version.
JEDIT: Here it is
Password: fanedit
That establishing shot looks fantastic!
Thanks, it’s basically a digital version of this effect:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YdHTlUGN1zw&t=3s
I cut the still image into five planes and zoomed them towards the camera at differing speeds to achieve the 3D effect. The large areas of featureless white snow helped to hide some of the seams.
I really like what you’ve done with the ending. I’m wondering if it could be trimmed more and still be as effective.
After Rey is staring at R2 and BB8:
-Outdoor night shot
-R2 hooked up
-Rey sleeping
-Island establishing shot
-R2 waking up
-Closeup of Luke turning around
-3P0 informing Leia about BB8
-Luke lifts hood
-R2 displays map
-Luke staring at camera while fading to white
-Leia says “Luke”…Only seeing Luke from Rey’s point of view might make it feel more dreamlike. Rey arriving on the island and wandering around in TLJ will be something we wouldn’t have seen before.
I have considered removing some of the wide shots like the one with Rey and Luke and the cliff on the left, and you’re right that it would probably heighten the dreamlike nature of the events, but on the other hand a lot of these shots are the best in the scene, compositionally. There’s only so much of the scene that can be removed without losing some of the essence of what made the original scene work.
After making a version with and a version without the TLJ Rey waking up shots, the version without feels much more sudden and less dreamlike. Going from the night shot, to Rey, to R2, to Rey fading into her waking up, makes for a much smoother flow into the weirdness of the Dream/Vision. It’s the difference between telling the viewer that the dream is happening and immersing them in the moment.