Alright, ran through last night with your Ep 1 (this time to enjoy as opposed to pick apart đ )
Suggestions for TAS - lower the pitch of Jar Jarâs voice. It seems higher here, which accents the fact that he already has worse lines in this movie (not much you can do about the lines, âMesa so smiling to seeing yousaâ, âimmediately emergency powahsâ). Youâve done an awesome job making the two films flow.
I know youâre having some effects work done - any chance you could fix Anakinâs face after he says âIâm sorry, miladyâ. Youâve removed almost all creepiness. Here it lingers.
Flying through the fire is cool except⌠when they come out of it, there is nothing behind them to indicate theyâve just come from a red hot area. Made the flow of the chase seem strange to me.
With Possessions, attachments, compassion - by removing possessions, youâve removed the standard movie trope of 3 things = comfortable payoff. By leaving only two, the scene becomes slightly awkward - since itâs an awkward movie anyway, I think this hurts.
The kiss would work great with a fade out. Fade completely to black silence. Then open to the next morning with Anakin on the balcony. Callback to ANH doing it once or twice, and makes it even more suggestive.
⌠I donât know if thereâs a different line that can be inserted, or something⌠but
I cringe every time I hear Obi-Wan tell the Prime Minister when they get up to check on the clones âThatâs why Iâm hereâ. He literally just spent the entire conversation explaining he knows nothing about whatâs going on and is only there to track a bounty hunter.