I haven’t seen your original edit so I cant compare the two scenes but I really enjoyed this 10min footage. The removal of the fart jokes and the two headed alien commentor (I always hated that alien) from the scene gives it a more serious tone. It would be good to remove that American accent commentator to if possible and just leave the Alien language in. I thinking adding Jabba back in doesn’t take away anything from serous tone and adds a bit of fan service. I would be really interested in watching you V2 version. Do you have an ETA?
Thanks for your feedback! I don’t think I will be removing the American announcer voice, but if you’d like to see an edit that does that, check out l8wrtr’s shadow of the sith: https://ifdb.fanedit.org/sots/