Here’s the introduction of the army:

In keeping with the idea that Obi-Wan is lead through a mystery in this movie, You don’t actually know that they’re clones up until this point. The Kaminoans don’t mention the word ‘clone’, they only explain that they have an army in the previous scene. The audience finds out when we cut to the shot of all the identical children.

I removed the name ‘Jango’ and instead referred to him as 'The Bounty Hunter, Fett".

The cut from Padme to the Army suggests that while she’s having a fun time with Anakin, her mind is also on other things. I always wondered why she looked sort of upset at the end of that shot?

I also thought that Obi-Wan smiling at this weird mystery-army didn’t fit with his character and made no sense? Also, at the end of this scene, I might cut back to Anakin and Padme, or I might cut to Jango’s apartment? I feel like the spot I left it at is a good ‘cliffhanger’ for a scene transition, but I feel like we haven’t spent enough time with Obi to justify cutting back to what Anakin is up to.

Also: I plan on adding more dialogue to the shots of the clones.