Here’s Anakin and Padme’s conversation on the ship, but (hopefully) less awful.

I removed anything that could possibly show Anakin to be creepy, I even tried to make him sort of relatable. I tightened up reactions and made all of the line delivery faster, especially by removing awkward pauses between Christensen’s lines (faster, more intense.) I hope it comes across as a better scene than the original.

I also removed the implication that Jedi are forbidden to love by removing the second half of Padme’s line.