This radical take on AOTC sounds interesting, especially this Geonosis intro.
But could you please tell me how you will work around the sequence of Padme and Ani trying to save Obi and explain why they went to Geonosis again. I might have missed it while reading the thread.

Anyways it may be worth a try to move the whole Geonosis part to the beginning (maybe recolor them, btw your recolor looked nice) and just keep the Dooku fight (it could take place in Dooku’s evil tower, a mashup of Vaders Castle and the Orthanc 😉) and let the movie end with the creation of the Grand Army of the Republic and a declaration of war).
I am not completely sure how this could work (just an idea yet), but it would darken the tone a lot and fit the mood of the Anakin’s downfall. On the other hand the final movie may be rather short.