I’m leaving away from the droid factory action sequence, partly because I’m hoping to cull a line from it for 3PO to replace his line as they leave Tatooine.
Fair enough, but I do want to point out that I don’t think l8wrtr’s edit of the Droid factory scene includes R2 and 3PO at all, so you’d likely be able to use the line elsewhere if you adhered to a similar edit. Ultimately it’s your edit and I think the way it plays now works, even if it does seem a bit odd that they sneak into a secret entrance only to immediately sit down at the negotiation table.
Hard to disagree too much with that. Let me sit on this for a bit, but I do like it and it makes good sense.
On second thought, the deleted Obi-Wan and Mace scene does add some connective tissue to the Kamino mystery that isn’t there without the “Yoda & the Younglings” scene, which I don’t think anyone wants back. Without the presence of either of those scenes, Obi-Wan goes straight from not finding Kamino in the library to arriving on the planet, with no mention of someone possibly deleting the files from the archive.
You could add the edited-down Dex scene anyway, right where it was the theatrical cut, but I don’t think it allows you to remove the deleted Obi-Wan and Mace scene like I had previously thought. At that point, it might be best just to leave things as they are, even though I kind of like the idea that Obi-Wan has weird alien friends/informants.
Hal borrowed audio from Attack of the Phantom to alter Zam Wesell’s dying words to “Kamino System.” This helps remove the Dex’s Diner sequence as Obi-Wan now has the information about where the dart and bounty hunter (Jango Fett) is from. The dart has no context now. I personally think The Approaching Storm is fine the way it is.
I do have to admit, if any scenes to bring back into a new version of this edit, it would be a trimmed version of the garage scene between Anakin and Padmé. Anakin still doesn’t have to admit to her that he killed the sandpeople.