Good points all. The sequential version feels like it needs Rey waking up and being in that final map scene, but since I don’t have such a shot of her waking up, and since her costume changes back and forth for the map scene (among other reasons), I am leaning towards going back to the parallel version like Ziggy suggests. Definitely going to go further with the dream distortion in any case.

I’ve decided to leave this scene for the time being and come back to it when I can judge more passively.

In the meantime, the deleted Kylo on the Falcon scene needed some work:

https://vimeo.com/337922444
Password: fanedit

Just as Rey should be going down a darker path as the film progresses, this felt like an opportunity to push Kylo’s character in the direction of being more conflicted and tempted by the light. The laughter hopefully reads as a contrast to the anguished screams Rey hears in the castle.