Nice, looks like ash or salt. I like it very much!
The dream sequence drags on a bit and I got confused. It felt a bit like parallel editing.
Perhaps a shorter, more mysterious sequence where we only see Luke from the back (and no sword).
Might that make it more confusing though? We would just assume it was Luke, and Rey wouldn’t actually make the unspoken plea for his training if I cut the saber.
SomethingStarWarsRelated said:
I agree with 4throck. It did feel like parallel editting as opposed to a dream sequence. Yeah I would suggest it being shorter too…maybe adding some sort of dreamy filter either on top or something around the boarders of the frame aaand perhaps playing with the sounds by adding reverb or something.
I mean it is parallel editing.
When you suggest making it shorter, I assume that means cutting some of the music which would be problematic since that scene is carried almost entirely on the strength of that cue.
I guess I just want some more specific ideas for how the scene could be cut without parallel editing and without making it longer.
Some version of R2 finding the map could happen right after the night establishing shot, and after the map is revealed cut to Rey and the entire dream. Then it would probably need a transition shot before going back to Finn. In this case the entire Jedi Steps cue would be required for the dream, and additional time would be reserved for the mapfinding.
Alternately, Rey could dream of Luke before R2 finds the map, and the dream could end on the dramatic notes when Luke turns to face Rey. When the music goes quiet again, instead of the lightsaber it could cut back to R2 and have a condensed scene where 3PO says they must tell the others and the condensed map reveal. Cut back to Finn as usual. This version wouldn’t add any time to the sequence and avoid parallel editing.
Thoughts?