No worries, I appreciate your constructive criticism š
The un-dreamlike nature of the shots is the biggest problem for sure, but the length of the ending is actually shortened from the original, which was almost exactly 6 minutes from the shot of Chewie grieving to the end credits. My version right now clocks in at 4:45.
BTW, the entire edit sans credits is 2 hours and 13 seconds on the timeline, cutting 7 minutes from the original.
JEDIT: Updated the map reveal sequence slightly. Rey should probably be erased from the first shot of that scene since sheās supposed to be asleep and in the new costume, but thatās in the realm of the possible.
Password: fanedit
I absolutely love this in concept, and I think you executed it incredibly well, nitpicks aside. I think initiating a more clearly defined dream quality to that sequence, and possibly a way to show her waking up, and this would be perfect.
The best part of this, in my opinion, is that the cloudy/foggy weather now fits perfectly as a slightly erie dream sequence, and doesnāt create the minor continuity error that exists between TFA and TLJās sunny shoot on Skellig Michael.