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IlFanEditore said:

Final duel clip.

At around 1:45 you jump cut from Doku with his back to us to Doku facing us…
Really stands out 😉

I don’t have a problem with the Yoda fight, as long as you trim the wild jumping.

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IlFanEditore said:

Excuse me, what’s deepfakes?

Sorry I don’t know if you’re kidding. Deepfakes is the process of putting nic cages face on everyone else’s using a certain software I don’t understand. 😉
Here’s an interesting one
https://youtu.be/ANXucrz7Hjs

That channel has some pretty cool videos…including some tutorials.

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4throck said:

IlFanEditore said:

Final duel clip.

At around 1:45 you jump cut from Doku with his back to us to Doku facing us…
Really stands out 😉

I don’t have a problem with the Yoda fight, as long as you trim the wild jumping.

At first I didn’t mind that Dooku cut. But then I realized it didn’t look good.
It’s already fixed 😉

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SomethingStarWarsRelated said:

IlFanEditore said:

Excuse me, what’s deepfakes?

Sorry I don’t know if you’re kidding. Deepfakes is the process of putting nic cages face on everyone else’s using a certain software I don’t understand. 😉
Here’s an interesting one
https://youtu.be/ANXucrz7Hjs

That channel has some pretty cool videos…including some tutorials.

No, I was not kidding, lol.
That’s so cool!

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https://vimeo.com/325268706
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As you can see from the clip, I changed a bit the ending.
But just before Anakin and Padme’s marriage, Windu asks to Obi Wan “Where’s your apprentice?”.
Considering that I don’t want Anakin to be Obi Wan’s apprentice, but at the same time I need Windu to ask where Anakin is, I don’t know how to make this work.
I tried adding the word “Anakin” to Windu, to make him say “Where’s Anakin?”, but it doesn’t work well.
Does anyone have suggestions?

PS: I’m thinking that I can leave 3PO here. He is not built by Anakin, but we don’t actually need an introduction. He is just one of Padme’s droids, or something like that.

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Yeah, I tried that.
At first it didn’t sound ok, but now I’m working again on it, because that’s the only thing that could work.
Thank you, man!

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IlFanEditore said:
Does anyone have suggestions?

That’s a brilliant clip, great pacing and just the right amount of dialog. Music is spot on too.
But the background noise on the voices breaks it. So you might be forced to stay with Obi-wan and Mace a bit longer just because of that. It’s very hard to remove that background noise…

But showing them more will make it harder to change the dialog… Anyway, perhaps you can find some usable dialog in games ? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1lxFz6lguyU

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Thank you both, I think I’ll do as you say. I tried making Obi Wan’s voice work, but each time it sounds a little bit off…
I’ll keep Obi Wan saying “Escorting senator Amidala home”, and then show the marriage…

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New crawl?

"War threatens the galaxy. Hoping to defend it, Anakin Skywalker has managed to become a Jedi Knight.

Assembling many planets and fleets, former Jedi Master Dooku created a SEPARATIST ALLIANCE to leave the too bureaucratic Republic and become independent.

To prevent this catastrophe, Padmé Amidala, Senator of ALDERAAN, travels to Coruscant to join her collegaue Bail Organa to vote on the critical issue of creating an Army of the Republic…"

What do you say?

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Could anyone tell me if the crawl sounds ok?
I’m not British nor American, so I’d really like to know if it’s ok, or if the first one was better.

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Lol, thank you.
To read English is one thing, but to write it so that it sounds ok as a Star Wars crawl is totally different, haha.

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Ending test.

This is just a test. I like this music (it’s the track from the last Game of Thrones’ episode), but it’s too different from the classic JW style.
Anyway, I was just trying to have a different montage, showing the meeting Dooku/Palpy as a plot twist…

https://vimeo.com/333819053
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IlFanEditore said:

This is just a test. I like this music (it’s the track from the last Game of Thrones’ episode), but it’s too different from the classic JW style.
Anyway, I was just trying to have a different montage, showing the meeting Dooku/Palpy as a plot twist…

Oh so I wasn’t the only one putting this music in movies for a montage feel! Honestly, the I’ve wanted to put a lot of Game of Thrones soundtracks over edits and I agree with the different feel. Not so much the style, but the instruments used. If some composer out there were to translate this track to a John Williams feel that would be superb.

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EDIT RELEASED.

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I finished it.
Well, personally I’m quite satisfied with the result. The Color Correction usually works, I like the title and the new music tracks.
I think the process that builds the love story between Anakin and Padmé is at least acceptable: less cringe, less Anakin talking.
I feel that everything is more grounded. No Jedi being like semi-gods. They have supernatural powers, but they are more believable. During the chase sequence, Anakin does not fall for miles from the speeder-car before reaching the bounty hunter. During the Obi Wan/Jango fight, Kenobi does not use the rope like he did in the original. The over the top droid factory sequence is gone, replaced by the Dooku/Padmé deleted scene. The duel with Dooku is shorter, and Yoda does not fight, but we can see him as a strong Jedi because he saves Kenobi and Skywalker (maybe I will make him fight against Palpatine, as a single duel in the whole saga where Yoda uses the lightsaber, because Palpy is too powerful).
Obi Wan is not Anakin’s master. They are friends, and Kenobi is older and wiser, but they are the same. Two Jedi Knights, that’s all.
Of course C3PO does not appear until the end, in the marriage scene. I don’t think we need an introduction. He is one of Padmé’s droids. That’s all.
I tried to show Palpatine as a good guy. We should not have any doubts about him, during this movie. I don’t know if I managed it, but when he speaks I added “positive” music tracks, like the Force theme or the Alliance theme from ROTJ, to make the audience believe he is a good guy.

It’s not revolutionary, it’s not perfect, and there are some problems which I noticed myself (some color correction and the deleted scene having a poorer quality compared to the rest of the movie, first of all). If I will return to this I will change something. But at least for now this is it.
Of course these are MY opinions, but considering that I’m the one who made the edit, I’m not a reliable judge for this.

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I’d really really really like to have some feedback.

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I Just finished watching ep 2. It’s much better now.

Brian

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I finished watching the edit and here is a bit of feedback…

The first change I really enjoyed was the ANH music added at the transition to Palps office. To me, that works well in helping establish a more “friendly” Palpatine.

If you make a 2.0 edit, I would consider removing the skeptical look from Yoda at Palps when he’s talking about extra security. That would help further establish we don’t know Palpatine is a baddy yet.

Again, nice addition of some ANH music. The OT sounds from Mr. Williams has some real emotion (for lack of a better word) behind it that a lot of the prequel scores seem to lack.

The scene where they all sit down and talk in Padme’s apartment: It’s a frustrating scene to edit. There’s only so much you can change because of the lack of footage and/or dialogue. And then, if you cut out the main piece of the scene which is Anakin and Obi-Wan bickering, the scene mostly becomes everyone sitting down and then almost immediately standing up again. With all that being said, your edit works pretty well. One continuity issue: Anakin says “We will find out who’s trying to kill you, Padme” and in the next shot he’s looking down. It’s just a bit jarring IMO.

The buildup to Zam shooting works well. What piece of music is that? It’s nice. Again if a 2.0 is going to happen, I would suggest removing the percussion from the first shot of Zam getting her gun. Since we all know these movies really well, we know when something has been changed by an editor. I think what I personally find jarring is when shots get shifted around (for a good purpose) but the audio (in this case, music) remains the same. So something like that takes me out of the moment.

Moving onto some of the color grading. I’m no expert when it comes to this stuff….I can’t always identify when something looks a shade different here or there. That being said, the Jedi achieves looked really cool in green! But why didn’t you finish the scene? They turned back to blue by the end of it. The only other thing that bugged me was in some scenes characters skin tones were desaturated except for their lips…they looked a bit orange/pink to me.

I like how you ended the scene with Anakin and Padme eating on the transport.

I have never seen anyone edit their first “kiss” this way. It threw me for a loop but it also works very well.

I also like the music you’re using in the asteroid belt chase…is that from TFA?

The best edit involving cutting the droids (specifically 3PO) out was Anakin and Padme leaving Tatooine. I can’t say I’ve seen anyone use this particular edit before. I liked it.

I know there’s not much to work with and you needed to somehow have Anakin and Padme brought into the deleted scene with Dooku…but it’s a bit odd. Using them going into the hallway with the Geonosians milling around behind them and then wiping to the deleted scene…it’s unclear as to what happened. I mean, WE know, but a casual viewer may not.

The ROTJ music with Palpatine being voted emergency powers does wonders for this scene IMO. Excellent!

I like the music choice for the arena monster battle here too. It seems like you’ve definitely put some thought into your music choices because they do fit into your scenes quite well.

Cutting out Padme’s jump is, of course, quite welcome! 😉

Again, the music added to the beginning of the battle of Geonosis is excellent! I would love to know all of your sources.

When Dooku turns to see Yoda and then turns away from him: you might consider zooming in a bit on that reversed footage so that it might hide the fact that it is indeed reversed.

And, again, the music at the end of the film is a really nice touch.

Overall (in case it’s not obvious), your music choices and placement are my favorite things about this particular edit. IMO, you could’ve gone much further with your editing choices…but AOTC is not my favorite to begin with…that being said, this is a fun alternative to AOTC. Thanks for sharing!

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First of all, I can’t thank you enough for this feedback.
Now…

  1. I surely will return to this sooner or later, and I think I’ll put all your suggestions here. Yoda looking at Palpy will be removed.
  2. About the Jedi Archives… that’s my idiotic mistake. I changed the color in the first part as a test. Then I was satisfied, but I forgot to continue. And I realized that only when the edit was already uploaded -.-"
  3. Everything else… you’re right. Some parts in CC will need some extra work, and Dooku turning back at the end aswell.

Anyway, all the music additions are from the OT, or Rogue One. The tracks during the assassination attempt, during the first part of the “asteroid” chase and the battle of Geonosis are all from Rogue One. And yes, during the second part of the asteroid chase the track is from TLJ (battle of Crait).
Thank you again! 😉

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I’m glad my thoughts helped!
Also, thanks for letting me know about the music.

Oh! I’ll make one more suggestion for your edit: See if you can smooth out the audio (specifically, the original music) where you’ve made cuts. Like, go into the surround channels and mess around a bit. That’s ultimately the only other jarring thing to me.

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Can I have a link to your edit?

The unfortunate reality of the Star Wars prequel and Disney trilogies is that they will always be around. Forever. They will never go away. It can never be undone.

I also prefer to be referred to as “TNT”, not “Freezing”.

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