I like your efforts but for me it was a bit off.
Anakin is still creepy and you focus too much on him. I think AOTC works better if you focus on Padme and Obiwan.
He is not that important on this movie. Let Anakin be a secondary and remove as much dialog and awkwardness as possible.

Padmé is the lead, and their relationship only works if she’s calling the shots. This is in line with the way she takes lead once they get to Naboo.
So make her talk first and end the scenes as much on her as possible. You will see that it works.

Don’t be afraid to cut stuff.
The first scene works better with no covered camera talk and just distant indistinct talk instead of “does she have a boyfriend”. Cut that and the pacing is better, with the awkwardness gone.
(I have a cut of this scene I can share if you wish, don’t want to hijack your thread)

Also, I’d cut the transport scene completely and use the extended arrival scene instead.

But keep at it, I like what you are doing, just my 2 cents.