Very interesting. I like your TFA crawl, but you might be pushing it in terms of how many words you’re cramming in there. The other thing that personally doesn’t work for me is your framing of Leia “proving that diplomacy is not an option.” I get what you mean, but the wording makes it seem like she’s a warmonger or something, when the Resistance is essentially a defensive force.

I like your TLJ crawl as well, but as a small note I think the way you’ve worded the second sentence would make it confusing who “their” refers to in “their leadership.” The idea of invoking a goal of unity is a really interesting one that I like a lot, and would add another layer to the throne room sequence (amongst other things). Personally, however, I still like the “spark of hope” phrase.

As for the “chaos reigns,” I still stand by that there isn’t really a problem with “The FIRST ORDER reigns” (you used it yourself!), but looking back at our conversation, I do like the flavor that “chaos reigns” brings.