Been thinking crawls recently.

Here’s where I’m at with TFA (a tricky one):

Luke Skywalker has vanished. Without the Jedi, the mysterious FIRST ORDER has risen from the ashes of the Empire and will not rest until Skywalker has been destroyed.

Failing to convince the complacent New Republic of this growing threat, General Leia Organa hastens to form a brave RESISTANCE to reignite the fight against the dark side.

Desperate for her brother’s help, Leia has sent her most trusted pilot on a daring mission to Jakku, where a clue has been discovered to Luke’s whereabouts….

I figure my use of “the dark side” is probably controversial but I like what it adds (I’m also potentially planning adding references to the force in other crawls). The alternative is probably something like “the fight against the forces of darkness/evil.”

The other thing that might be reworkable is I remember RL suggesting phrasing to the effect of the New Republic doesn’t want to start another war. I’m kinda weighing whether I like that or the complacency angle better.

Here’s my TLJ crawl:

Chaos reigns. Having decimated the peaceful Republic, Supreme Leader Snoke now deploys the merciless legions of the FIRST ORDER to seize military control of the galaxy.

With the remaining Republic forces fearful to face this rising tyranny, only General Leia Organa’s band of RESISTANCE fighters stand to fight, certain that Jedi Master Luke Skywalker will return and restore a spark of hope to the cause.

But the Resistance has been exposed. As the First Order speeds toward the rebel base, the brave heroes mount a desperate escape….

Wasn’t sure if I wanted to change this one at all at first but talking with RL a few months ago landed me here, basically just the original with some slight nudges. Maybe a little on the wordy side but at the moment I like it.