That’s pretty good, becoming a little clearer maybe.

A few notes:
The shot of just R2 when you wipe to 3PO, I feel like we should see a little of BB-8’s head since he was so close to R2 in the last shot, or, have R2 by himself when Rey first looks at him.

When 3PO says, “That sounds like…” I feel like we should clearly hear R2 and not BB-8 like it seems. Maybe you have it where we hear both of them simultaneously, but I think she just be R2 beeps, at least right before 3PO says that.

I like the new “She found what?” line. I wonder if it would be possible to create a quick shot of Rey in that scene to show she is there with them. Maybe with a similar technique you used to create the shot of Rey standing in the foreground, looking at R2 and BB-8. Maybe this isn’t necessary though.