I like it but it does feel rushed.
If a scene doesn’t work, it’s better not to have it at all.
I’d drop the suitcase packing scene for example. Much better Anakin and Padme scenes latter on in the movie.
The less Anakin talks, the better and more in character. Vader doesn’t talk that much 😉

Here’s something I’m playing with.

Anakin crying when he decides to help his mother:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1wrfhfxZCz_XN6eqXLEJplWoonB0dnjVm

Anakin’s mother is already dead:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=13tiQ2TXGr5hgvq75oQVwQtTAqZuP14zq

Just playing around and sharing ideas 😃