Very awesome work. But I have a few suggestions.
I am under the impression Kylo is projecting the images meant to intimidate Poe into his head? If that’s the case I get why you used those sequences but I think you’re missing out on an opportunity to highlight some character sub text.
It makes more sense to me, for Kylo to attempt to intimidate Poe with imagery that focuses on only his power instead of the First Order’s. Kylo has little man syndrome and is insecure and emotionally immature. He feels he needs to remind everyone how tough and evil he is as a way to reassure himself.
The result of changing this sequence helps to highlight the specificity of Poe’s response. He responds with, “the Resistance will not be intimidated by you.” It reinforces the differences of the two characters’ ideals. Poe thinks outwardly, he is not an individual, he and the Resistance are one, bound by a common goal of peace in the galaxy. In contrast, Kylo is inward thinking, only concerned with his own interests, using the First Order as merely a means to an end. I believe Poe can sense Kylo’s isolation, insecurity, and desperation and is praying on in an attempt to fight back in the only way he can in that moment.
Other suggestions
Is there any way to make the shot of her scratching the line into the wall look like she is drawing a very small figure of a person? Then the wide shot reveals the whole drawing. A rudimentary version of Luke standing on top of the island.
Use some imagery from from the “dark side” part of the island from TLJ. For example the hole into the cave, or the silhouettes she sees the mirror in the cave, just before they merge together and turn into her reflection.
*I hope this all makes sense it took me forever to word it correctly.