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Post #1267985

Author
IlFanEditore
Parent topic
SHADOW OF THE PAST (A Phantom Menace edit - RELEASED!)
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Date created
4-Feb-2019, 6:15 PM

Ok, I’m thinking about changing things.

I want to start the movie with the Tatooine scene.
New crawl:

"The JEDI ORDER is in turmoil.
Grand Master Yoda senses a disturbance in the Force, fearing the return of an ancient enemy.

Endlessly debating about the dangerous activities of the TRADE FEDERATION, the Senate is powerless when Viceroy Nute Gunray stops all shipping on the peaceful planet of ALDERAAN, threatening a full scale invasion.

On his way to smuggle the Queen of Alderaan to Coruscant, hoping for assistance, Jedi Knight Qui-Gon Jinn is contacted by his former master Dooku and sent to the desolate planet of Tatooine to retreive a Force sensitive young boy".

So… by setting everything in the crawl I can start things on Tatooine and I don’t have to hide Padme.
Then go to Coruscant.
Then go to Naboo-Alderaan and place ALL of the battle scenes here, so that it feels like the important third act of the movie.

Tell me what you think. Is the crawl ok?