Huh, that is interesting.
I always assumed, theatrical or Restructured, that the Resistance had heard rumors about a First Order weapon and had some indirect evidence, like the Resistance show might be setting up when Poe and Kaz go to a system with a missing star later this season. So they know something big was going on, but they had yet to find enough direct evidence to bring to the Republic. Probably similar to how Rogue One implies a similar thing with the Death Star. No evidence, but rumors. I personally think it isn’t a big issue, but I think this is an interesting idea.
It kind of makes me think of the first main Force Awakens trailer, when it shows Poe being interrogated and then cross fades into the shot of the trees being knocked down by the shockwave of Starkiller firing. It almost gives it that vibe that Poe is seeing that. You could also use that shot if you didn’t want to directly show the planets blowing up in the “vision”, or the shot of Kylo watching the laser pass by since that never happens in Restructured. I always thought that shot would be to cool if you could make it look like the Finalizer was in hyperspace with Kylo looking out the viewport for when they’re heading to Takodana.
But personally I don’t know how effective it would be to have repeat shots. Maybe if there was a way to distort them a little. Maybe a subtle Force sound effect when it shifts from scene to scene too. They could possibly be briefer than Poe’s own memories, to kind of imply that Kylo’s own thoughts are slipping through rather than being projected to Poe intentionally.
Also, I wonder if it would work to see a very brief shot of BB-8 in the end, even if it was slightly crossfading in over Poe’s face and the cataclysm, like Poe’s trying to hold it back but that crucial piece of info is starting to come through. Not sure how exactly that could work, but I feel like it would fit in with the purpose of the scene.
Also, I really like the shot of Lor San smiling. I don’t know, it just feels sad that this friendly old man has just died and we’re being reminded of it. I like it.