Keep the faith! The impact your plans have on this board don't matter. It's in the product-- either your edit will rock or it will suck. There is enough material going into this version to make it stand completely apart from anything else out there. Personally, I quite enjoyed "BotF," but thought "The Clone War" left a lot to be desired. I had the uncomfortable problem of watching it and thinking "well, why didn't you change THAT?" every minute or so. I don't think anyone's seen ways to fix the structural problems of the AotC script before. With the dreams, the re-edited romance, the anger at Obi Wan-- this edit will actually have a story. When it's all said and done, that's the most important change that can be made. The final act of TPM or BotF needs this kind of work too -- the death of Qui Gon has to affect Anakin and that affect has to have an impact on the defeat of the Trade Federation. Without that beat, Ep I is still unfinished. But getting completion on that level in Ep II has been more difficult and will be more surprising to fans who check out SotDS.
Your dream notes sound fantastic. You've gone the extra mile to make that beat work. Now Anakin will be so much more sympathetic.
As for adding a Dukoo line before his death in Ep III -- the line could be as simple as "Wait--!" which has to exist somewhere in LOTR or SW.
I hear CC's ideas about the title of "Queen" being ceremonial and having her give up her throne and fighting for democracy -- but it can't just be assumed that she did all that without somehow putting that material into the movie. Maybe the opening crawl? At any rate, the romance story will miss the "walk" on Naboo where they talk about Anakin's mom. That scene does double duty of talking about democracy and talking about Anakin. I don't necessarily love the idea of young elected queens-- but I don't hate it. I can conceive of a space government that trusts the good heart of young ladies, their clarity and present mindedness. I wish they'd made this clearer. I just kind of dread the potential holes that will appear if we drop the "democracy" of Naboo.
I agree with CC that Gungans seem to need alien voices-- but the idea of an Australian Jar Jar does a lot to make him more interesting. I would take these ideas and marry them -- if Jar Jar's alien voice could lose the "whacky Jamaican" accent and sound tougher, deeper-- he'd be a LOT easier to take. Could he talk "Gungan" with an Australian accent?
Commander Courage is absolutely right, we brainstormers get the fun job. You have to face the bugs, glitches, mixing problems, and crashes of editing. You have all my respect and I'll help any way I can--
Which means I'd better volunteer to be Lama Su if you still need someone. I can get access to equipment if you can tell me what you need me to do.