Looks like you’re returning to the Had Abbadon idea for your eventual Revenge of the Jedi?

For some reason it’s not working yet for me. Could you possibly give the planet more contrast, so the dark side of the planet is even darker?

I think it is also a cool framing, with the planet center punched on the screen, but I wonder if you tried to replicate other planet establishing shots from the OT that maybe it could help sell it.

EDIT: Also think the same reasoning is why your Yavin 4 mock-up felt a little off to me. I know you probably wanted to try a different angle, but I wonder if maintaining generally the same framing would help make it work better.