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Post #1241566

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RogueLeader
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The Last Jedi : a Fan Edit Ideas thread
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Date created
20-Sep-2018, 12:13 AM

@Dom
It’s funny because I knew you were going to say that. I noticed that too, but it didn’t bother me as much. I get what you’re saying though.

It would sort of be like if the ANH crawl ended like:

Pursued by the Empire’s sinister agents, Princess Leia races home aboard her starship, custodian of the stolen plans…

When it’s actually

Pursued by the Empire’s sinister agents, Princess Leia races home aboard her starship, custodian of the stolen plans that can save her people and restore freedom to the galaxy….

It’s just missing a little something extra maybe. If you really wanted to add a little extra maybe you could do something like

The evil lord Darth Vader, obsessed with capturing Luke Skywalker, dispatches thousands of remote probes into the far reaches of space until the Rebel Alliance is found…

-rebel base/outpost
-Alliance

Not sure if it’s grammatically correct.

I agree about the TLJ. That makes sense. I’ll experiment with them a little bit more, but let me know if you guys prefer any of those new alternatives or have any other ideas.