I have to admit, that's better.
I wanted the original line cut because it puts a hole right in the middle of the thread I'm trying to reconstruct. If he's not that into Obi Wan, he sure could give a crap what Obi Wan thinks about his light saber being cut in half. When Lucas put that line in, he changed the tone of the entire sequence. Leave it in, and Anakin's pretty much accepting his role as Obi Wan's apprentice. Take it out, and the jury's still out, he's still mad and we still have a story.
I'm afraid I don't personally think the change you suggest overcomes this problem.
I sure appreciate you taking the time to hear all my ideas.
BTW-- the idea of a new Han/Leia alternate theme made my heart leap. Hurray!
Keep up the good work.