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Post #1234670

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IlFanEditore
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THE CHOSEN ONE: A STAR WARS STORY (V2 in development) (Released)
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Date created
16-Aug-2018, 8:17 AM

SparkySywer said:

I feel a little bad for criticizing this, because it’s better than any work I’ve ever put out, but you asked for comments so here’s some stuff I noticed:

I personally and subjectively just don’t like the music used in the opening text, and I really don’t like the idea of force sensitivity, but those really feel like me things, so I don’t hold it against you or the fanedit in any way.

I really do like the way setting cards were used, adding the year was a good idea. Although it’s not obvious to everyone what BBY means. It limits accessibility a little bit.

Really like the way you cut out the podrace. Starting the movie where you did was effective. Additionally, cutting right from the Phantom Menace to Revenge of the Sith is also something that works pretty well.

The color correction in the Battle of Coruscant looks great. Love it! The lightsabers look a little washed out in the hangar scenes though. Color correction elsewhere also looks great. Especially in the scene where Anakin confronts Padme.

The dream effect doesn’t work so well in that one shot where Padme, Anakin, Owen and Beru are all in shot, because Padme and Beru are still visible, but awkwardly cut off. It’s like in a Pan and Scan if two characters were right next to each other in the original or in previous shots, but one was just off screen. Feels weird. There are a few more shots like this, but that’s the first thing I saw. Additionally, there being two different dream effects is a little weird, maybe (if you plan on making a second version) recreate the second dream using your effect? I’m pretty sure it’s possible using footage from later in the movie.

The last scene with Vader is a little tonally weird. Definitely less cringey than the original, and more accurate to Vader’s character, but it doesn’t fit very well in the otherwise kinda chill ending.

I love the voiceover in the last scene. It’s not the first time I’ve seen something like this in a prequel fanedit, but I fall for it every time.


I normally don’t think that you can make good prequel fanedits without straying far away from the Star Wars formula. This doesn’t really disprove that, because it does stray away from it, but it was surprisingly good and could act as a good replacement for Revenge of the Sith.

Thank you so much!!!
I don’t think I’ll make another version of this, but if I will, I’ll be sure to take note of your suggestions.
About the Tatooine dream scene I agree with you. I rewatched it some days ago and I don’t really like how it came out…