Cutting Leia’s scenes are exactly the opposite of what was needed in TFA, but here I think it makes sense. The story right now is too bogged down in what should be a simple pursuit/ticking clock plot, and Leia unfortunately contributes to this overcomplication.

However, there might be a way to start the movie right as the remnants of the Resistance flee the battle. We could establish in the crawl that most of the short range fighters on both sides have been destroyed, with essentially just Poe and Kylo left on the battlefield. As Poe and the last bomber manage to destroy the destroyer, Kylo strafes the cruiser and his escort blows up the bridge. We don’t see Leia get blown into space, since at that moment the fleet jumps to hyperspace.

I imagine this scene would have to be very chaotic, full of closeups and ships being blown up to make it seem more like a pitched battle than an ordered evacuation.

With the battle, I’m not sure about what shot to use for the pan down.

Another thing that needs addressing is the ‘cloaked binary beacon’. In the proposed edit this device is never explained and simply appears in Finn’s keeping after he wakes up. To fix this, the binary beacon could be placed in the deleted scene of the Rey hologram, where it could be seen resting on the bench beside Finn’s head. Notably, in TFA there’s only a brief glimpse of that area of the bench so I could even have it come into frame for just that second. Finn’s line ‘a cloaked binary beacon’ could be repurposed in this scene to make it clear. It’s a fairly simple fix and it highlights the strong friendship between Finn and Rey.