Hmmm, not bad. The first shot the proportions seem off, like he is too small for the scene. I will say the zoomed out scene is much better. I would probably take him off the close up and just have him make that beeping sound at the beginning of the zoom out scene. That may work better.

The next thing to do is to clean up the Fin/Rose deleted scene. If you watch it, look at the background in the shuttle. It is unfortuantley an unfinished scene in where the background effects for the shuttle interior is a bit rough.