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Post #122126

Author
MTHaslett
Parent topic
Episode II: Shroud of the Dark Side (the TM edit) (Released)
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Date created
10-Jul-2005, 5:03 AM
Reading your beat-sheet outline is great Trooperman. Hurry up and send my discs because I can't wait to finally like Episode II.

I see you still want to do the "meadow" scene which I keep objecting to. Fine, you're the boss. I've finally come to terms with it -- but I offer this: I think the scene will work best if it can end on Padme saying "You're teasing me" without letting Anakin say anything in reply. As long as Padme doesn't believe Anakin's thoughts on politics are serious then it works as intended -- as a foreshadowing of Anakin's fall. But if she suspects he means it (which is how it plays as written) then he comes off as her worst possible love match.

Second objection (sorry), I see you still have the "You've grown up" Anakin/Padme scene after she gives Jar Jar her power. What does this scene get you, I wonder. It is so awkward and all it's content is covered better elsewhere in my opinion.

Otherwise, great work. Thanks for keeping it going.